http://marlowe78.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] marlowe78.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] hells_half_acre 2010-11-17 08:32 pm (UTC)

Whew, I was actually pretty worried about poor Sam. And I didn't even think about the necklace anymore, sneaky you. It seems that Sam's not-anymore addiction will play a bigger part in this, right?

Loved this, the battle was awesome, and Teddy is such a cute kid.
Wonder if he'll have longer hair now, after Sam helped him so heroically.

I wanna add some suggestions: Maybe if you do something like this, with the time-switches, it would read much better and less... jumpy, if you include it in the story. If possible, I mean.

Maybe like, "Only 30 seconds before Dean did ..., Neville jumped..."?

Just a suggestion :D

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